Thanks for your comments, Jon.
1. I agree, but the lower thirds will be removed when the voice over is done. I just put them in just so people at least have an inkling of the places they look at.
2. I think I know the two shots you mention here, but there are no shots used twice. They do not appear to be much different now, but when placed adjacent you will notice that the first shot is much more zoomed in and has almost too much movement, so that was the reason to put another shot in the middle.
3. I would have liked to use more ‘humanizing’ shots, more people action. My dilemma however is that this was a trip with a group of people of 55+ and this clip is intended to interest the youth in all aspects of sea sailing. The youth may not be interested in seeing balding, elderly men with bulking bellies in action. I’ll take your comment to heart and try to find some more action shots.
4 & 5. I agree and will make some adjustments.
In general it is tight, I know, but Vimeo is somewhat different from a clip on a website, that wants youth to watch a clip. It could have been a bit longer overall, but I have to wait for the voice over by a well known TV personality to see and hear the flow. Currently it is only a work in progress.
Thanks again for your comments.
Guys, keep it coming please.
Harm Millaard