Like most of the others, I found the visuals in the piece to flow pretty well. The only thing that bothered me about it was the narrator. I found his voice and delivery to be very “newsy”. This is the kind of subject – not straight news, but an interpretation of information from the filmmaker’s point of view – that would really benefit greatly from the kind of delivery that an actor brings. As I watched this I imagined various voices doing the material – not huge stars, but accomplished actors like James Cromwell, John Heard, Tom Skerrit. Obviously, you’re not going to get anyone like that, but even someone from your local civic theatre group can command attention and better complement your visuals for this material. My .02.
As an academic project, you did an excellent job. You should be proud.
Dean