Version 2 : Need comments for my first Demo REEL!

[John Dickinson]

Hi Mark,
It starts out with great potential. The 3D ident at the top is top notch (watch out using too much Shine though) and the toon animation that follows is great. The next “Spoutnik” clip is a bit long with not much happening and seems to slow the whole thing down. What’s the deal with the car carrier shot… what graphics did you do there? Also, the second time we see it, later in the reel it cuts to the back of the truck but in that shot it looks like you’ve accidentally cropped the left side off… The breakdown of the toon shot is a good thing (I do this in my reel) but it all happened so quickly I wasn’t sure what I was meant to be seeing even though you put text at the bottom. I find wipe transitions are a good tool, for example, wiping from the green screen version to the comped version, for helping the viewer understand what was done in the shot.

I like the track you used and felt the whole thing needed to be edited a bit tighter to the track, having said that, I know it’s not easy when you don’t have much content. All in all a great effort!

best,

JD

John Dickinson
Motionworks
http://www.motionworks.com.au

[Michael Szalapski]

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