Need input on movie trailer

[Allen Zagel]

Wow! Eerie! I thought it was quite good. However is there a reference to the Buddah? I would have referenced it in the trailer better.

Allen

ASX Media Productions
https://www.asxvideo.com

[Jerry Waters]

The story is about a bank robbery going bad and the lives of 4 people involved – two detectives. One, an African-American female, keeps a Buddha with a rosary around its neck on her desk. She is the “sage” of the movie and this is referenced in a second trailer I’m doing now. I should have it posted in the next day or so. Thanks for the response.

JerryW

[Randall Raymond]

Bad trailer for what, looks like, some decent acting.

Good trailers tell you what the movie is about, and persuade a person to buy or rent it.

Ditch this trailer. Start over with a VO that begins: “What happens when a bank robbery goes very wrong…?” Re-edit the whole thing.

(The zoom in on the bag of coke in the trunk is an insult. Like we couldn’t figure out a plant when we see one.)

Hint: take a real hollywood trailer and match it – if you did 30 cuts, a hollywood trialer would do 100 in the same time frame. Try it – as a study.

[Jerry Waters]

Thanks for the comment. I’ll try a different cut but your biggest help? It was the VO suggestion. The movie isn’t ABOUT a bank robbery going bad. That is only an event. It is about HOW LIFE WORKS and that should be made clearer. (We all know what happens when a bank robbery goes bad. We’ve seen that a thousand times. For a change, you haven’t seen what happens in this movie a thousand times.)

JerryW

[Randall Raymond]

[JerryW] “(We all know what happens when a bank robbery goes bad. We’ve seen that a thousand times. For a change, you haven’t seen what happens in this movie a thousand times.)”

Now you’re talkin’. The trick is to match the pace of your movie in the condensed form of the trailer…then double it!