Feedback Wanted on my AE Project

[Walter Soyka]

Hi Lloyd — I’d be happy to take a look, but the links in your post are broken.

Walter Soyka
Principal & Designer at Keen Live
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[Lloyd Claycomb]

Oppps… Working links might help, eh?

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/2900108/feedback%20ll.mp4
https://dl.dropbox.com/u/2900108/pass…styleboard.psd

[Walter Soyka]

[Lloyd Claycomb] “Working links might help, eh?”

Broken links are link spinach in your teeth; everyone notices, but it’s always awkward for both parties to point out…

The storyboard link is still broken. Perhaps it’s too long to simply paste in? You can hyperlink text by selecting some text in your reply box here, then clicking the blue underlined L button right above the text box, then finally replacing the text in between the quotes in the inserted HTML with your URL.

Alternately, you could click the disk icon, and the COW will host your file for you.

[Lloyd Claycomb] “I’m working on a sequence here, the style board was approved. Some Elements were tweaked to use owned assets, and now I feel some of the original impact has been lost. The music is forthcoming, so final animation timing is as well… We like the outdoorsy feel, and the general rustic brown orange color theme.

I watched the video, but without context, I can’t figure out what it’s supposed to mean. Can you give a little background?

Walter Soyka
Principal & Designer at Keen Live
Motion Graphics, Widescreen Events, Presentation Design, and Consulting
RenderBreak Blog – What I’m thinking when my workstation’s thinking
Creative Cow Forum Host: Live & Stage Events

[Jeff Burford]

Hope I can offer my thoughts although I am not an Artist!

First off, I must say that I am not a Graphic Artist and have little knowledge of Design (just dabble around with it), however when the little boy comes out on the tractor and the sheep is present (other elements gone except radial background). To me, the Boy should be more present, he seems too small to attract much attention and gets lost up in the scene. Over-Size him! Also, the Text in the Balloons are not really readable due to their style and appeareance.

Also, the color range of the background behind the hills… for me is to close to the foreground colors in the design. I would suggest more bluish tones for the spanned sky (or spoke). Also, the Wheels and spokes of the tractor are dark as well as the graphic elements behind them, so that they also get lost…..

Just my first thoughts.
Cheers