Renato Sanjuán
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The audio and the reediting are a big improvement, so is the split screen. Like Mark says, if you can do something for the backlit shot of the girl it would be great and also very nice for the showcase.
Congratulations and good luck.
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Hi Andrew,
just to add up on what is already good advice…
Your sound comes in with a straight cut and is kind of jarring. You could use a short audio fade in. A few frames might do the trick, try different lengths and see which one you like.
The New Urban Arts titles are way too long. They break the rhythm between the two shots.
Some foley would help also. I miss the sound of the guy lying down and also some ominous footsteps from the guy with the knife. I can hear some on the live sound but they lack weight. You could carry them on to the second title.
I believe I saw some kind of hose attached to the wrist of the guy with the knife. If you’re able to erase it it would be a good thing to showcase at the end.
The sound of the knife is kind of bland. A more tearing/breaking kind of sound would be good. You could also add breathing and grunting sounds for both of them, especially at the end when the guy looks at the liver. The music is also a little too loud at times.
At 1.10, right before “I gotta go” I can hear the reverb of another word. I also see the end of a hand gesture from the actor.
I would overlap the end of “a cup of coffee” on the girl instead of cutting right before she talks. I think the dialogue is too much in favor of the guy, I’d like to see a reaction from the girl. I’d also loose the gesture after “I’ve seen too many of those” as it doesn’t look natural. You could squeeze in a shot of the girl there.
I´d also tweak the color grading on both scenes a little and think of another way to show it off, such as a horizontal split or a repetition of the guy’s face. The left of the shot is the back of her head and the difference isn’t really that obvious. It will be easier to notice on the face.
I don’t know how much of this is feasible with your footage, gear and whatever other constraints you might have. Everybody’s a critic when it comes to editing. It’s fun to play the critic every once in a while though 😉
Cheers.
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There was a thread on this same topic a while back and some pretty interesting methods were suggested, such as using a mirror to flip the image or even watching it upside down.
I usually use the method suggested by Glen, I burn a DVD or make a mixdown and watch it on my TV. It makes a big difference. Different room, different screen, a couch instead of a chair, no chance of stopping and fixing this or that little thing, you just sit and watch it as a whole.
Turning down the volume is also good. If it flows with no sound it’ll be great with a soundtrack.
I also try to remember what my very first impression of the footage was. I sometimes develop a Stockholm Syndrome for bad footage. Weeks and weeks of trying to get it to work can make you think “it’s not that bad, it kinda works…”
Then you see it on your couch and it doesn’t really work. Then you remember you never really liked it. Time to get your scissors.I find my very first impression is a very accurate measure.
This is the thread I was talking about.
https://forums.creativecow.net/thread/27/859575#859588
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If you plan on going with a pc you might want to check out the suggested builds on this page. I built version 7 myself and I’m pretty happy with the results. They don’t sell the stuff, they just test the build and put out the specs.
I’d second the advice of not going cheap with the video card. It pays to at least get a quadro fx 560 or 580. If you’re planning on using other software (like Resolve, sapphire plugins and others) you might want to see if it benefits from a quadro, CUDA performance, etc…