Looking For Feedback

[John Cuevas]

I noticed when you transitino between “Individual Interviews” and “Multi Camera Presentations”, 2 of the interview picture-in-pictures with the text but the third one fades out underneath the next shot. That looks like a mistake and should be fixed.

Johnny Cuevas, Editor
Thinkck.com

“I have not failed 700 times. I have succeeded in proving that those 700 ways will not work. When I have eliminated the ways that will not work, I will find the way that will work.”
—THOMAS EDISON on inventing the light bulb.

[Mark Suszko]

Lose the countdown at the front; it just makes people wait for no reason and it’s not a proper countdown with a 2-pop anyhow. It’s an affectation.

I think the fonts will pop better if you blur and dim the blue and white waving motion back behind them. Right now, parts of the text are hard to read wherever they line up white-over-white, with just the black edges of the letters really showing.

A good trick is to look at these using the blue-only button on your monitor, or if you don’t have one of those, look thru a piece of blue lighting gel or look at a B&W monochrome monitor (or turn the chroma all the way down on your screen) to check contrast and value relationships of colors.

Also, try viewing it from at least 12 feet back from the monitor. Is everything still reading well?

It IS much better, but I still think it needs a voice-over and less text. Edit ruthlessly, then cut some more.

[Dan Asselin]

Thanks Mark;

I will blur and dim the bkg. Makes total sense.

the reason that I don’t use a voiceover is that I am trying to reach people in their offices and many people I know don’t have the sound working as their default configuration for their desktop.

Does that make sense?

I have the countdown and auto-play in an attempt to make the viewing idiot-proof when they hit the link on my page. Having said that, however, I think you are right about the countdown…..especially now that I have unburied the lead message.

Regards

Dan

[Mark Suszko]

Auto-play will get lots of people swearing at you, don’t enable that. Instead, leave a clearly labeled play button and mute control.

When people browse at work, they may have their speakers turned up and when an auto-play pops up, it announces to the entire floor of the office what they are doing. You just lost a sale and made an enemy. People want the choice of enabling audio to be theirs, and the choice of starting a play-thru to be theirs.

I work in a very large organization with thousands of computers across it, not all of them have sound cards, then again, the folks that don’t have sound cards are not as a rule the ones that would be decision-makers or recommenders of services such as yours. You can believe that managers have sound cards installed today. Not only that, your presentation will be seen on phones as well as monitor screens, so you really have no reason not to add voiceover today, in 2013.

[Dan Asselin]

Cut….Cut….Cut

One more version for today….Thanks again Mark

https://reels.creativecow.net/film/sales-video

[Mark Suszko]

Getting closer now.

You still have the first two text boxes rolling in from the wrong direction.

The text typography is better but not quite there yet.

The web address needs to go up and stay up right to the end, so I don’t have to scroll back thru the video and park it to write it down. The address is also longish; have you considered a shorter, nickname-like link?.

The regions where the web address is should have a linking region to it so that if you click the address in the video, it takes you to the home page directly, no need to write the address down. Make things as intuitive as possible. If the viewer says: “can I click on that? What would happen?” – you should already have a planned result implemented.

[Mark Suszko]

Lose the disco music. Try ambient electronica, or light jazz.

[Mark Suszko]

The Text Parts That Are
Sentences Should Not Capitalize
Every Word,
As That Reduces Readability.